Show don’t tell!

1. Cold tears dripped down Katy’s depressed and pale face as she gazed sadly up at the grey filled sky. Her tears splattered like rain drops all over a violet collar with a golden tag that once was around the neck of a hazel nut brown puppy.

2. Two beautiful and flavorful layers of moist chocolate cake was gently covered with mouthwatering mint colored icing. A bite of this magnificent cake could make an old man sing and dance! While it stood tall on its white stand, it was decorated with small white flowers and each petal had its own unique size and melted in your mouth. The smell of this delicate cake flowed around the house attracting every single living thing from a tiny ant to my big brother that loved to eat everything.

3. A cloudless baby blue sky was filled with the sound of cheerful chirping birds. In a small field mini trees stood boldly amongst many fresh and vibrant flowers. The smell of these lovely flowers made everything seem calm and relaxing. The area was covered in green but the blooming roses gave color to the scenery.

4. Dark menacing clouds consumed the sky. Rain drops fell like missiles and exploded when hitting the ground. The thunder reassembled a lions loud and terrifying roar and frightened everything to go into hiding. Lighting flashed across the dark scary clouds and lit up the sky for a mere second.

5. Bubbling with exhilaration I skipped happily up the cool and calm drive way of my own small home. I couldn’t stop buzzing about what happened today, that I was hopping all over the house like a mad bunny that had to much carrots! The day had to be the most amazing day of my life!